- It was a beautiful morning.
What made it a beautiful morning? Let's say it was the sunshine. That's static. So, perhaps the sunshine could sparkle on the surface of the river. OK, but could be better. The surface could ripple, for example, the river could gush. Perhaps there were trees leaning over the water. Make the trees specific varieties - willow is the obvious one, and conjures up images of long strands waving in the breeze...
- The supermarket was busy.
What makes a supermarket busy? Obvious answer - people. Mums and dads, and kids and babies and OAPs and stressed out checkout assistants and shelf stackers. Add in a load of trolleys, and tannoy announcements and flickering fluorescent lights and the hum of the refrigerator units...
- The office was extremely untidy.
Papers spilling out of files, books stacked up in piles over the floor, nowhere to sit as all the chairs are full of stuff already, envelopes fanning out over the carpet, paper clips as numerous as swarming ants...
Think active verbs and visual images that imply movement - eg spilling, fanning, piling and so on. Make your description as dynamic as possible for interesting reading.
At last! I've got my finger out and have committed to running some day courses:
Writing a Novel - 31st July in Bath and 18th September in Truro
Getting a Novel Published - 1st August in Bath and 19th September in Truro
Contact me on sarah@sarahduncan.co.uk for more info...
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